Thread:FrenchTouch/@comment-18005945-20150131081252/@comment-6548012-20150131140626

Hello,

Well, that's pretty interesting as it is, though what I would advise you to do is to put your pictures all on the same side (right is better), that makes the fanfic more readable, also you may want to use the Template:Dialogue, in order to make your page prettier, oh and you could maybe add some titles here and there for the overall mise-en-page.

But anyway, on the story, I feel like it's pretty cool, though even for a video game logic, there are some inconsistencies, for example the "modified bike" which doesn't have more specifications about what it is (but I think that's secondary though), or the cyanide bullets, but eh, for now, what I find more interesting is the background you're establishing, and if you continue on this way, you may do something pretty awesome. So yeah, I'll be looking forward to the next update, then I may have some more to say :)

Anyway, good luck, and have a nice day, Regards, FrenchTouch (talk).