Talk:Nicholas Fury (Earth-5340)/@comment-6548012-20151016140104

The quote is good, but not in that situation. Let me explain.

The message that it conveys is great, when I've read the first part, it seemed like a speech to give more courage to the troops, to keep his image like Gonzales should do it, and even though the wording is a little bit misplaced, it's excusable, the problem being Fury just melting down with the family thing, which doesn't make sense with the character you're creating with the beginning of the quote, but is also used against Red Skull in a fight opposing them both, and why would Fury make such a speech just while fighting a guy? Does he burst into an emotional state everytime he fights? What is the meaning of it? The idea behind it though is good, considering the S.H.I.E.L.D as his brotherhood, but saying that to a random guy at a random moment doesn't specifically make me think like he's the patron of the S.H.I.E.L.D, you know, he's not supposed to know he's gonna die right now, and even if he does, it would just reinforce the “bad guy lets you start an emotive speech before killing you” cliché.

And, he just seems like the hero who is too good to be potential sensical. The S.H.I.E.L.D isn't really a child choir, so I guess that Fury should be a bit more severe, and less... Captain America than that. Oh, also, “within and out” just seems better than “within and without.” :)